Thursday, January 28, 2010
वो शख्स
जो होना था वो एक एक कर होता चला गया
वो गुजरे हुए कल पर रोता चला गया...
कुछ अजनबी आते रहे, उसकी ज़िन्दगी में
वो सबको इक धागे में पिरोता चला गया...
हर इन्सान में दरिंदगी के कुछ धब्बे मौजूद थे
वो उन धब्बों को इत्तेफाक समझ धोता चला गया...
दोस्तों की एक पूरी फ़ौज खड़ी की थी उसने
वो एक एक करके उन सबको खोता चला गया...
दूसरों से उम्मीद रखना ही उसका सबसे बड़ा गुनाह था
वो इस उम्मीद के बोझ को ढोता चला गया
सब अपने में मगन थे, उसकी हालत से बेपरवाह
वो जाने कब ख़ामोशी में सोता चला गया...
जो होना था वो एक एक कर होता चला गया
वो गुजरे हुए कल पर रोता चला गया...
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I haven't read any of the hindi writings before..some of the lines relate to everyone somehow somewhere.."दोस्तों की एक पूरी फ़ौज खड़ी की थी उसने
ReplyDeleteवो एक एक करके उन सबको खोता चला गया...
सब अपने में मगन थे, उसकी हालत से बेपरवाह
वो जाने कब ख़ामोशी में सोता चला गया..."
too good..keep the good work up..!!
जो होना था वो एक एक कर होता चला गया...mast hai dude
ReplyDeletereally good one...keep it up...i think everyone faces this phase of life sum or the other time..good work!!
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ReplyDeletecommendable wrk Syu as olways,, once again buddy, u hv ritten a masterpiece...
ReplyDeleteKya hindi likhi hai yaar, applause for u....
i jst luvd these 4 lines & every1 can relate 2 these lines "दूसरों से उम्मीद रखना ही उसका सबसे बड़ा गुनाह था
वो इस उम्मीद के बोझ को ढोता चला गया"
"जो होना था वो एक एक कर होता चला गया
वो गुजरे हुए कल पर रोता चला गया... "
Syu buddy, U ROCK...
ol d best for ur future endeavours :)
hmmmmmmm...simply awesome...
ReplyDeletewhoever will read wud simply feel it somewhere deep in heart...Gr8 work champ..
Kya Baat Kahi Hai.... Maza Aa gaya.. Bhai...Great
ReplyDeletephenomenal !!!
ReplyDeletewo chahta tha dil mein rakhna
ReplyDeletepar sabdo ke dhage pirota chala gaya!!
yes...nice one..forgetten to write hindi poetries but you have revived some of my memories!!..
bahut acha philosophical poetry hai!!
saaarey doston ko tahey dil sey shukriyaa:)
ReplyDeletebeautiful lines syu ;)... it took me 5 min to read (as u noe d reason ;)) ... bt those are in all way true ;)
ReplyDeletereally nice lines
ReplyDeletethat's really well written... and it's all so true!
ReplyDeletekeep writing
~Sanz
http://sanz360.wordpress.com/
kya baat hai bhaiya...matlab ki bas kya baat hai.....bas ab kya kaha jaye.....hila dala yar tune to....too gud bhai....
ReplyDelete@ Richa~ Thanx Nonu, I know u had 2 STRUGGLE:), so thanx 4 d effort
ReplyDelete@~ Reflections~ Thanx dear!
@ Sanz- Thnx dear for appreci8ind d lines
ReplyDelete@ Rohit~ Arey ab 2jhey pasand aa gayi matlab likhna saarthak ho gaya, samajh jo gaya 2 poori poem, ha ha just kidding bhai, thnx 4 d feedback!
mast hai bro.....lag raha hai jaise geeta sar hai....waise har line ko kafi close se likha hai ......mast hai...mere ko to kafi tym lag gaya padhne mai and usse jayada comment karne mai............well keep writing
ReplyDeleteWell written....
ReplyDeleteKeep Writing
awsome bhai!!!!!!!!!bhut hi accha likha hai....
ReplyDeletehar insan me darindagi........wali line to yar...........too gud!!!!
@ Sahil~ Shukriya dost for all ur time:)
ReplyDelete@ Vijay~ Thnx dear!
@ Gomes~ Dhanyawaad bandhu:)
ReplyDeleteWah wah... bahut badiya !
ReplyDeleteoye tu gazal bhi likhta hai... very nice lines.. movies ke liye try kar.
ReplyDeletereally amazing suyash....kaafi hadd tak real bhi... "दूसरों से उम्मीद रखना ही उसका सबसे बड़ा गुनाह था"....this is so damn true...whr ever thr is expectation thrs is disappointment.....
ReplyDeletereally liked it...
@ Anunoy~ Thanx dear!
ReplyDelete@ Deepak bhai~Dil ka dard jab panno par aata hai, ek aansu bhi dariya ban jaata hai, dil tootne ki awaaz bhi nahi hoti, aur saara dard ik gazal ban jaata hai...
@ Anjy~ Thanx a lot dear! The inspiration of this poem was the line u noticed. Many of my frens have suffered becz of EXPECTATIONS, which made me write this...
Great Work!!!!!!!!This is the reality of life
ReplyDelete@ Shuchi~ Thanx dear!
ReplyDeletevery well expressed, poetic n true :)
ReplyDeletemy fav lines:
सब अपने में मगन थे, उसकी हालत से बेपरवाह
वो जाने कब ख़ामोशी में सोता चला गया...
Nice...but remember meter??? :P
ReplyDelete@Pragati~ Thanx a lot dear!
ReplyDelete@ Sis~ Tum taxi he chalaati rehna:)
Syu...this is with reference to who??? anywazz...its a lovely piece of writing...n i cn sense d emotion in ur writing...beautiful poem!!
ReplyDeletewant to write one word "GREAT"
ReplyDelete@ Dhriti~ Nobody in particular. It's my GENERAL view, u myt find a connection as well like others
ReplyDelete@ Dipu Bhai~ Shukriya!
दूसरों से उम्मीद रखना ही उसका सबसे बड़ा गुनाह था
ReplyDeleteवो इस उम्मीद के बोझ को ढोता चला गया
wonderful lines Hey Suyash :-) Keep it up Syu Babu :-)
Shabash mere sher!!! are tu to raju rastogi ho gya re!!! Gud dude..its awesome attempt...Ultimate!!! keep it up!!!
ReplyDelete@ Hey Poonam~ Thanx a lot Babi! Gud 2 c u visiting d blog again:)
ReplyDelete@ Sugam~ Bahot bahot shukriya bhai!!
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