Monday, September 14, 2009
तन्हा सफर
बहुत दिन हो गए शायद ख़ुद को भूल चुका हूँ मैं
एक बार आइना तो लाकर दिखाता कोई
वीरान पड़ी ज़िन्दगी इक खँडहर सी गूजती है
दो चार पल खुशी के कहीं से ले आता कोई
भावनाएं तो सबके मन में बसा करती हैं
मुझे भी कभी हंसाता या रुलाता कोई
जानता हूँ ज़िन्दगी भर का साथी शायद ही मिले
पर दो पल बिना छल के साथ मेरे बिताता कोई
मैने कब कहा की मैं हमेशा सही हूँ
पर कहाँ हूँ ग़लत ये भी तो बतलाता कोई
बारिश में खेलते बच्चों को देख अक्सर दिल ये करता है
मेरे साथ भी कागज़ की कश्ती तो बनाता कोई।
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Amazing... i loved the symmetry of your poem
ReplyDeleteYaar tum itne serious waise to nahi dikhte. but ur poem has a lota of depth seriously. agar ye tera khud ka hai to LOVELY....!!! I luvd it.
ReplyDeleteGud work.. Congratulations..
ReplyDeleteeven u are so young for this kind of thoughts, but creativity doesn't come with age, it comes with soul..
nice poem...n seriously now a days people are very alone but they dn't show dis to others...
ReplyDeleteVery Nice Poem! tumne bilkul sahi likha hai aaj ki busy life main kisi ke paas time nahi hai apne liye sochne ka, but tum itna depth main sochte ho aaj pata chala, Good Hai Keep it Up...... but tum??????????...
ReplyDeletethis one's deep.. an interesting parallel between today's loneliness and nostalgia abt d liveliness of childhood.. i especially like the line "veeran padi zindagi ek khandhar si goonjti hai"
ReplyDeleteprofound yaar truly...d poem reflects evry1's real situation dese dys...grt wrk!! good expression!!
ReplyDeleteits really nice poem,, absolutely fantastic & gr8 wrk...
ReplyDeletei lved d whole poem bt these lines r really beautiful & i really likd them :
"जानता हूँ ज़िन्दगी भर का साथी शायद ही मिले
पर दो पल बिना छल के साथ मेरे बिताता कोई"
d poem holds a deep meaning & touches both heart & soul
i really appreciate wat u hv written & d way u hv expressed it... seriously hats off 2 u!!!!
बहुत दिन हो गए शायद ख़ुद को भूल चुका हूँ मैं
ReplyDeleteएक बार आइना तो लाकर दिखाता कोई.....
Dis is in continuation and my feeling beyond u felt..
" kabhe hum us aeyne main apne "Akas ko to kabhe aeyne" ko dekte hai... wo Akas jo shayad aise na hote agar us aeyne ne humse chal na keya hota......" BUT THAN LIFE HAS GO SOMETIMES FOR URSELF SOMETIMES FOR OTHERS..
Gud creations. Gud work.
Monisha
Hey!! Wtsoever of ur creations u let me read till nw, dis 1's d most outstanding till nw. I esply lyk d melncholic note in dis. It does have melancholy in it, bt smhw it cums out very positively. d attitude, d hopes shining in dis 1 sz smthng that made me luv it..dint lik it...i luvd dis 1!
ReplyDeleteDis lyn ``बारिश में खेलते बच्चों को देख अक्सर दिल ये करता है
मेरे साथ भी कागज़ की कश्ती तो बनाता कोई।''made me feel lyk myslf..me 2 feels d same! barish n d tiny boats! Nostaligic
Is jindgi me tanhi to bahut hai par in tanhi me kahi na kahi khud ki kushi chipi hai. ishi ka nam jindgi hai, har pal ko khub jio kyuki ye pal nahi ane wala hai
ReplyDeletenice feeling and perfect poem to inspire all of us.
You desperately need a girlfriend :) lolz
ReplyDeletenice poem...all are alone and then all make d crowd...you want to enjoy both d worlds...
Amazing Hey Suyash, perfect combination of words, lines and most important feelings....., Kya hua agar koi muskurata rehta hai, muskurahat bhi toh gum ko chupane ka ek jariya hoti hai, koi kitna bhi humse chupana chahey ek line he har baat ko keh deti hai……..:-)
ReplyDeletetoo good...you dun seem to be so lonely...ur poetry shows u r very emotional:) and ya ur hindi is really good.
ReplyDeletei told ya pehle bhi, ur not wot u seems lyk...
ReplyDeleteinsyd u is a unfolded mystery...
Suyash um sure behind ur every i dun't care is a little emotion....................
जानता हूँ ज़िन्दगी भर का साथी शायद ही मिले
पर दो पल बिना छल के साथ मेरे बिताता कोई
can make out thru dese lines.........
ur a swth8 and a gem of a person..though my hindi is really bad as u noe bt someway loved d rhythm of dis poem..........
shabdon ke band aise chalate ho
ReplyDeletebeetein zakhmo ko phir taza kar jate ho
tanhai ne yahan kisi ko bhi nahi chora
tum fizul hi in par aansu bahate ho
bahut khubsoorat gazal hai(kahin se copy to nahi mara na)
although i can't write lines in hindi but alvs luv reading those composed by u.....
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